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Hi everybody,
If you need help with IELTS writing:post essay here.
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[Pino]

That´s really nice.

Thanks for your cooperation.

[farheen]

Hello IELTS_blog,

Can we able to evaluate more than one essay from this forum? Please answer this as soon as possible, As I saw in yourpost, that the instuction says "you can evaluate one essay".

Anyways, This will be of great help. Thanks!
Bye!

[IELTS-blog]

Due to huge demand it is just one, because the teacher is flooded
Sorry, guys, but it is the best I can do.

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[Guest]

It is a really great because it will help a lot.
writing part 2 is really difficult to be guess of the right standard by one self.

[farheen]

Hello All,

yes IELTS_blog, that is the problem for teachers to evaluate many essays even if everybody give only one ...but please could you evaluate my essays... just tell me is it better or become more worse . Actually I have to write essay in a very limited and stressed time and due to which the concepts and ideas don't come into my mind while I am writing essay. I wrote essays during lunch hour on my office due to which, there is a little bit disturbance in the area.

I have sent one of my essays to your site to evaluate it. It is surely a great help but I want as many inputs/suggestions as I can. I have posted my essay to one of the post, I hope you see it(my fifth essay) and there it has to be evaluated to 5 band. This become more frustrated. please help me as I have no proper time to prepare for the test. I want my band score 8...

Thanks and Bye!

[IELTS-blog]

Don't worry, friend - your essays will be checked. I am here to help, not to make things difficult for you

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[sue]

thank you very much to this forum.

[Happy IELTS student]

Dear Simone,

I got 6.5 in reading because of your help. I practiced hard under your guideline within one week. I improved from 5.5 to 6.5. Moreover, I got 6 in writing because I wrote only 130 words in Task1 due to lack of time. If I had got enough time, I believe that I would have got 7 or more. I am very glad that I met you before I took exam. You checked my essay only once but I read all of other students' essays that you corrected with useful advice. I would like to give some advice to other students if you really want to succeed. Please read all of the topic that IELTS-blog posted. That's the way I did.

Thanks alot, Simone

Regards
Happy IELTS student

[aradhan]

hi
its very useful someone correcting bfre giving exam.
where to post the essay?if i post it today when it ll be checked
thank u

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You can post the essay here (reply to this topic) and I will get it checked and graded for you (usially takes a day or two).

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[yusi]

Could an expert correct my essay.and inform me what band I owe..
Task 2 general writing:
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business,hospitals,crime detection and even to fly planes.What things will they be used for in future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?



In the last two decades cybernetics have experienced a major breakthrough .This led to the utilization of computers at nearly all parts of our daily life, from personal computers to complicated surgery performing.Surely the uptake of this technology facilitates a lot of difficult tasks but is this excessive dependance ripping the warmth of our lives?In this assay , I will outline how the availability of computers affect our lives.

Most of the daily tasks an individual experiences are time and effort consuming.These two fundemental qualities could be tremendously saved by the use of computers.The average period required to prepare a decent meal for a middle-class family is around an hour to and hour and a half when using traditional methods.This time could be literally reduced to half if computerized decives are used instead. Moreover,a busy businessman is enabled to easily close a profitable deal just with a touch on this highly programmed laptop while enjoying his family vacation and not having to exert an extra effort of travelling long distances just to land a deal.

On the other hand , new generations are growing remarkably dependent on these modern utilities , which makes them handicapped when it comes to preparing a cup of tea.Inaddition , pschycologist suggests that one of the main reasons for sucidal rate increase is recent electric inventions. This is due to that humans by nature stay emotionally healthy through socializing ,but due to the importance of modern technology to maintain a financially satisfying standard of life they gradually isulate themselves. As time passes by each of these individuals gets stuck in a vicious circle of loneliness that eventually leads to sucidal attempts specially among youngsters .

In conclusion, similar to every other invention computers has its benefits and drawbacks,I personally think it all depends upon how we use the given tools . Moderation is the key here to keep the balance and allow us to live in harmony.


So guys what do u think? This is my first assay ..any grammer,vocabulary mistakes?
Thanks in advance

[IELTS-blog]

In short: good essay, nice vocabulary, a little too long (340 words instead of 250), a few grammatical mistakes. The topic is not fully covered (what about the “things will they be used for in future?” part?).


Good luck!

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[yusi]

hi guys , first I would like to thank you for you great effort and for checking my essay..i would like to know what is my grade for this essay so i can track down my rate of improvement (if any !lool) and if it is possible to point out some of my grammer mistake..i always get comments that i have some grammer mistakes but no one tells me what are they!lool..iam trying to improve my english as fast as possible ..so thanks alot for everybody for helping

here is another essay for task 1 (letter)..hope you could check it too
could you make my letter and tell me my grade

You recently went shopping at the localmarket. When you got home and studied your bill you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase.
Write a letter to the supermarket manager explaining what happened. Tell thw manager how you feel about the error and ask him to do something about it.

Dear Sir ,

Iam writing to express my dissatisfaction about being charged for two products I did not buy from your store. Two days ago ,on 24th of June , I was at your Roushdy branch for my weeking grocery shopping . After selecting my desired goods I headed to a point of sale where the chasier had a tag with the name “Mona” on it. Usually I pay using credit card but this time I decided to pay in cash as I have not purchased a lot of goods . Paying a total of $75 got me abit suspicious for my rough calculation showed excess than expected . restudying my bill as soon as having arrived home , I found 2 items ; a shampoo ,worth $12, and a hair conditioner ,worth $13, added to my bill while not buying them.
Feeling frustrated about this error I took action by writing you this letter for Iam aware your store genuinely cares about its costumers’ statisfaction. Iam expecting immediate action to be taken to investigate this fault and refund me $25 that were paid by mistake.

Best regards,
Yusi


thanks in advance

[IELTS-blog]

Hi,
In regard to your essay – it looks like band 7 to me.
I can not post it here because it's a pdf file and posting links is also prohibited in this forum.
In regard to your letter – my corrections follow either (!) or incorrect word in parentheses (…).
You have several grammatical errors you make repeatedly, you need to divide your paragraphs more clearly and your letter is a bit too long (220 instead of 150 words). Other than that – you are fine for Band 7, nicely done!

Dear Sir ,

(Iam) I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about being charged for two products I did not buy from your store.

(You need to make this separate paragraph) Two days ago ,on 24th of June , I was at your Roushdy branch for my (weeking)weekly grocery shopping . After selecting my desired goods I headed to a point of sale where the (chasier) cashier had a tag with the name “Mona” on it. Usually I pay using credit card but this time I decided to pay in cash as I have not purchased a lot of goods . Paying a total of $75 got me (abit) a bit suspicious for my rough calculation showed excess than expected . (!)after restudying my bill as soon as having arrived home , I (!) have found 2 items: a shampoo ,worth $12, and a hair conditioner ,worth $13, added to my bill while not buying them.

(You need to divide your paragraphs clearly, leave 1 blank row between them) Feeling frustrated about this error I took action by writing you this letter for (Iam) I am aware your store genuinely cares about its costumers’ (statisfaction) satisfaction. (Iam) I am expecting immediate action to be taken to investigate this fault and refund me $25 that were paid by mistake.

Best regards,
Yusi

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[sruthi]

Hi
im writing sample essay and i hope u ll grade it as soon as possible.so that ill understand what mistakes im doing in it.
My topic is:
GOVERNMENTS SHOULD SPEND MORE MONEY ON EDUCATION THAN ON RECREATION AND SPORTS.DO U AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Education is main source of life and backbone for everyone and some people feel that authorities should spend more on education.Others feel they should consider both.I discuss that they should money where it is needed more then spending only on education.

Firstly i feel physical training and mental relaxation are as important as education and they shouldnt be neglected.For example developing countries like India,authorities spend less amount on sports.As a result many young talents are not recognised.Due to lack of money or sponsers neglecting them they are not able to play international level games.So many of them are dropping midway as they are not able to establish as players.Taking that into consideration parents are discouraging the kids and trying to avoid them to take this into carrier.As a result nations are loosing the young talents .

Secondly they are neglecting to develop vaction spots.They are releasing very less money to develop them.For example if we take India there are many monuments and historical structures which are getting negleted and not taken care.If they spend more budget here it not only retain thousands of years culture but also attract foriegn tourist.

Thirdly in others view,government should spend more on education.Accordig to them it gives life for many people.If the people are educated the whole nation is educated.They even say first nations should concenterarte the amount of illitrates in there country and try to solve that problem.

I conclude by saying,government should consider the needs and requirements before releasing budget.They shouldnt neglect any field how important the other one may be.They have to appoint commities and go accordingly to solve the problem.


This finishes my essay and ill be waiting to see the grade
thanku so much
sruthi[/b]

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[yusi]

Writing task 2 :

Should the same laws which prohibit the sale and consumption of heroin be applied to tobacco?


Recently, a hostile debate arouse when a few well reputable health organizations suggested the application of a similar act to that of heroin selling and usage prohibition. In this assay, II will analyse why the adoption of such a law could be a breakthrough in our youngsters safety, according to my vision.

Firstly , tobacco does not differ much from heroin when it comes to the later addictive effect. Nicotin , the active ingredient in tobacco , exerts its effect by acting directly on smoker’s brain cells. Numerous experiments carried out by scientist on animals ,specailly rats, proved that this toxic chemical does lead by time to dependency , just similar to the effect experienced with herion.

Secondly, restriction on cigerattes selling will surely show an instant decline in tobacco smoking. “ Having an easy access to cigarettes puts a tremendous pressure, specially on teenagers,to resist such a temptation “ Dr.Hisham , head of Pschycology department at Alexandria Medical college , states firmly. “Giving the new generation the sense that the severity of smoking is equivilant to other lethal drugs usage woulod be a life saving step,they will thank us for as they get older.” he continues.

To recapitulate, applying of a futuristic law as the suggested one will definetly have a positive impact ,not only on young people’s health but on our society as a whole.


Thanks in advance guys

[nganh]

Hi all,
this is my essay. i am very appeciated if you guys help me evaluate mine.

Topic: As there is increasing unemployment in the world while at the same the those who have jobs are working harder and harder. It would be better to have 4 day working weeks for everyone, and so create more jobs. What is your opinion about this suggestion ?


There are many radical reasons that result in unemployment. Morever, the reduction of working time of proficient workers in order to create more time for employees who have no jobs is unlikely a suitable solution. conversely, this suggestion would not only result in the loss of competition in searching for jobs in workforce but also bring about a number of drawbacks.

First of all, there would be no competitions in jobs.Employers are likely to recruit cream of top university graduates, eliminating employees who are incapable of working or lack of abilities such as creativity, team-working. Therefore, if both kinds of them were emploed in the same situation, there would be non-competitive anymore. In additon, workers often tend to try to work at higher positions so the they could be paid better salaries. As a result, if everybody could achieve these positions, the rivalry would be vanished, so the development of society may be leveled off.

The reduction of day working in each person which results from having more free time could lead to a lot of drawbacks. With 4-day working, everybody still three days to enjoy themselves for other activities such as go shopping go travelling and these days are excellent time to blow money. However, the cutting working time may go along with the decline of salary, so people have not enough money to spend for their leisure time. Consequently, our society could be deteriorated because of their crime such as prostitutions, robbery undertaken by the workers who nee money to mantain the life. Futhermore, these adverse effects also occur due to short-haul unemployment. In other words, while this suggestion could decrease unemployees, it could cause an enomous number of contemporary unemployed workers.

In conclusion, the recommendation of 4-day working a week not only causes the erosion of competition among the labourers but also bring on plenty of disadvantages for society. It is not a judiculous method to prevent unemployment. Perhaps, gorvernment of each nation should find another measure which is more eficient such as investigating into education.

thanks in advance.

[IELTS-blog]

You can’t get 6.5 in writing - it is either 6 or 7, no half bands.
Your essay is a good one, you are moving towards the 7 but you are not there yet.
Work on:
1) Repetitions- you have to avoid repeating yourself
2) Write more in general, what people think or say and not what you think or say
3) When you write paragraph, write the main issue first, explain it, and then give examples. Your third paragraph (Secondly they are neglecting to develop vaction spots) could use some improvements there.

Good luck!

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[Guest]

hello, I hope someone could mark my essay.
General module ,Task 1

you have had a bank account for a few years.Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect.
Write a letter to the bank.Explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it.

Dear Sir,

Iam an old client of your bank and Iam writing to express my discomfort toward a letter I have received three days ago from your bank.

The letter mentions that I have overdrawn my account with a sum of $240 ,which is not possible , for my last bank draft paper states having $10,000 in current account. Moreover, my creditcard has been kept onhold, upon my request,for over five months now ,which makes the information enclosed at the bank's latest letter irrelevant.
Inorder to prove my claims, I have attached the most recent bank draft to have a look at it.

Iwould like you to take immediate action by rechecking this incorrect information. Inaddition, I would be grateful if you would close my account immediately. Looking forward to your prompt reply.

Yours faithfully,
Koka

hope anyone could check it and tell me my mark. thanx